TASK 2 (ADVANTAGES & DISADVANTAGES): HOME SCHOOLING

Topic: In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who are choosing to educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh the disadvantages?

Sample Answer (Viết canh giờ 35 phút)

In recent decades, there has been considerable debate as to what constitutes the most optimal way of schooling. Whether home education should be prioritised over the traditional educational system has remained contentious. While there are legitimate merits of the former, I would argue that this approach is on the whole a negative.

Supporters of home schooling argue in favour of a wide range of benefits. These proponents contend that this educational approach would enable parents to design academic programmes specifically tailored to their children, ensuring that they are able to learn at their own pace do not have to deal with unnecessary peer pressure. Under this domestic curriculum, children can also avoid unwanted academic burden and other issues related to the normal learning environment, including school-bullying, unfair comparison, and teacher biases.

However, these benefits are outweighed by significant drawbacks. Home educated children tend to lack academic competitiveness compared to those attending formal education since the former is often educated in isolated domestic environments with a personalised approach or one-one-one counselling. Without a structured curriculum, home-schooled children can also be more susceptible to distractions in domestic environments, including electronic devices, noises, and most importantly the lack of motivation. By contrast, in a systematic environment where there are class disciplines and etiquettes, children are required to follow certain guidelines, leading to improved individual learning, increased peer-to-peer collaboration and better learning outcomes. Last but not least, children enrolling in home schooling may be forced to prioritise certain subjects in line with their parents’ interests. For example, a family with an economic heritage may want to mandate economics-related subjects at the expense of other science disciplines and the arts. This unbalanced focus may have an adverse effect on children’s future development, preventing them from being well-rounded individuals.

In conclusion, though home schooling can be associated with increased personalised learning, reduced academic pressure, and the absence of educational unfairness, the negatives related to lowered healthy competition, higher distractions, and unbalanced curricula make it an overall disadvantage. Ultimately, domestic schooling should only be integrated to a certain degree to ensure a structured and well-rounded academic environment for children’s holistic development.

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Sửa lỗi Grammar sau khi viết

Topic: In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who are choosing to educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent decades, there has been considerable debate as to what constitutes the most optimal way of schooling. Whether home education should be prioritised over the traditional educational system has remained contentious. While there are legitimate merits of the former, I would argue that this approach is on the whole, a negative one.

Supporters of home schooling argue in favour of a wide range of benefits. These proponents contend that this educational approach would enable enables parents to design academic programmes specifically tailored to their children, ensuring that they are able to learn at their own pace and do not have to deal with unnecessary peer pressure. Under this domestic curriculum, children can also avoid unwanted academic burden and other issues related to the normal learning environment, including school-bullying school bullying, unfair comparison, and teacher biases.

However, these benefits are outweighed by significant drawbacks. Home educated children tend to lack academic competitiveness compared to those attending formal education since the former is are often educated in isolated domestic environments with a personalised approach or one-one-one one-on-one counselling. Without a structured curriculum, home-schooled children can also be more susceptible to distractions in domestic environments, including electronic devices, noises, and most importantly the lack of motivation. By contrast, in a systematic environment where there are class disciplines and etiquettes, children are required to follow certain guidelines, leading to improved individual learning, increased peer-to-peer collaboration and better learning outcomes. Last but not least, children enrolling enrolled in home schooling may be forced to prioritise certain subjects in line with their parents’ interests. For example, a family with an economic heritage  economics background may want to mandate economics-related subjects at the expense of other science disciplines and the arts. This unbalanced focus may have an adverse effect on children’s future development, preventing them from being well-rounded individuals.

In conclusion, though home schooling can be associated with increased personalised learning, reduced academic pressure, and the absence of educational unfairness, the negatives related to lowered healthy competition, higher distractions, and unbalanced curricula make it an overall disadvantage. Ultimately, domestic schooling should only be integrated to a certain degree to ensure a structured and well-rounded academic environment for children’s holistic development.

Tóm tắt lỗi Grammar

Câu gốc sai	Câu đã sửa đúng	Giải thích lỗi (Tiếng Việt)
on the whole a negative	on the whole, a negative one	Thiếu dấu phẩy sau cụm mở đầu “on the whole” và thiếu đại từ “one” để làm rõ nghĩa cho danh từ “a negative”
enables parents… and do not have to…	enables parents… and do not have to…	Thiếu liên từ “and” giữa hai mệnh đề song song. Câu gốc không có “and”, khiến cấu trúc không hoàn chỉnh.
school-bullying	school bullying	Không cần dấu gạch nối – “bullying” là danh từ, “school” là danh từ bổ nghĩa → không cần hyphen.
one-one-one counselling	one-on-one counselling	Sai cụm từ – dạng đúng là “one-on-one”, không phải “one-one-one”.
the former is often educated	the former are often educated	“The former” (trẻ em) là số nhiều → động từ phải chia ở số nhiều: are, không phải is.
children enrolling in home schooling	children enrolled in homeschooling	Dùng sai dạng động từ – cần phân từ II (enrolled) để rút gọn mệnh đề bị động.
a family with an economic heritage	a family with an economics background	Cụm “economic heritage” không tự nhiên trong văn cảnh này → “economics background” là cụm chính xác hơn và thông dụng.

Final Sample Answer:

Topic: In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents who are choosing to educate their children themselves at home instead of sending them school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent decades, there has been considerable debate as to what constitutes the most optimal way of schooling. Whether home education should be prioritised over the traditional educational system has remained contentious. While there are legitimate merits of the former, I would argue that this approach is, on the whole, a negative one.

Supporters of homeschooling argue in favour of a wide range of benefits. These proponents contend that this educational approach enables parents to design academic programmes specifically tailored to their children, ensuring that they are able to learn at their own pace and do not have to deal with unnecessary peer pressure. Under this domestic curriculum, children can also avoid unwanted academic burden and other issues related to the normal learning environment, including school bullying, unfair comparison, and teacher biases.

However, these benefits are outweighed by significant drawbacks. Home-educated children tend to lack academic competitiveness compared to those attending formal education, since the former are often educated in isolated domestic environments with a personalised approach or one-on-one counselling. Without a structured curriculum, home-schooled children can also be more susceptible to distractions in domestic environments, including electronic devices, noises, and, most importantly, the lack of motivation. By contrast, in a systematic environment where there are class disciplines and etiquettes, children are required to follow certain guidelines, leading to improved individual learning, increased peer-to-peer collaboration, and better learning outcomes. Last but not least, children enrolled in homeschooling may be forced to prioritise certain subjects in line with their parents’ interests. For example, a family with an economics background may want to mandate economics-related subjects at the expense of other science disciplines and the arts. This unbalanced focus may have an adverse effect on children’s future development, preventing them from becoming well-rounded individuals.

In conclusion, though homeschooling can be associated with increased personalised learning, reduced academic pressure, and the absence of educational unfairness, the negatives related to lowered healthy competition, higher distractions, and unbalanced curricula make it an overall disadvantage. Ultimately, domestic schooling should only be integrated to a certain degree to ensure a structured and well-rounded academic environment for children’s holistic development.

Vocabulary

1. considerable debate – cuộc tranh luận đáng kể
2. optimal way of schooling – cách giáo dục tối ưu
3. home education – giáo dục tại nhà
4. traditional educational system – hệ thống giáo dục truyền thống
5. legitimate merits – lợi ích chính đáng
6. wide range of benefits – nhiều lợi ích đa dạng
7. academic programmes – chương trình học thuật
8. tailored – được thiết kế riêng
9. unnecessary peer pressure – áp lực bạn bè không cần thiết
10. school bullying – bạo lực học đường
11. academic competitiveness – tính cạnh tranh học thuật
12. formal education – giáo dục chính quy
13. structured curriculum – chương trình học có cấu trúc
14. lack of motivation – thiếu động lực
15. systematic environment – môi trường có hệ thống
16. peer-to-peer collaboration – sự hợp tác giữa các bạn đồng trang lứa
17. better learning outcomes – kết quả học tập tốt hơn
18. unbalanced focus – sự tập trung thiếu cân bằng
19. well-rounded individuals – người phát triển toàn diện
20. holistic development – sự phát triển toàn diện

Dàn ý

Bài viết của mình sẽ bao gồm 1 đoạn mở bài (introduction), 2 đoạn thân bài (body paragraph), và 1 đoạn kết bài (conclusion).

• Intro: Mình mở đầu bằng cách nêu thực trạng ngày càng phổ biến của xu hướng giáo dục tại nhà. Sau đó, mình đưa ra quan điểm rõ ràng: mặc dù có một số lợi ích nhất định, mình cho rằng nhược điểm của giáo dục tại nhà lớn hơn lợi ích.
• Body 1: Mình sẽ trình bày các lập luận của phe ủng hộ việc học tại nhà, ví dụ như học sinh được học theo tốc độ riêng, tránh áp lực học đường và bắt nạt.
• Body 2: Mình phản biện bằng cách nêu ra những hạn chế nghiêm trọng của giáo dục tại nhà, bao gồm thiếu tương tác xã hội, không được tiếp cận chương trình học tiêu chuẩn, và sự thiên vị trong lựa chọn môn học của phụ huynh.
• Conclusion: Tóm lại, dù giáo dục tại nhà có thể mang lại một số thuận lợi nhất định, những hạn chế về mặt phát triển toàn diện khiến hình thức này trở thành một lựa chọn không tối ưu nếu áp dụng rộng rãi.

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Dàn ý cụ thể của 2 Body Paragraphs

Body paragraph 1: Lợi ích của giáo dục tại nhà

• Lập luận 1: Lịch học linh hoạt, phù hợp với nhịp độ học của từng học sinh
  → Trẻ có thể tiến bộ theo khả năng cá nhân mà không bị áp lực cạnh tranh.
  → Phù hợp với trẻ đặc biệt (tăng động, chậm phát triển).
• Lập luận 2: Tránh được môi trường học đường tiêu cực
  → Không bị bắt nạt, so sánh hay thiên vị từ giáo viên.
  → Không phải chịu áp lực thi cử và điểm số không công bằng.

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Body paragraph 2: Bất cập và hệ quả tiêu cực

• Lập luận 1: Thiếu tính cạnh tranh và kỹ năng xã hội
  → Không có cơ hội tương tác, làm việc nhóm với bạn bè cùng trang lứa.
  → Dễ bị cô lập, kém phát triển kỹ năng mềm cần thiết cho tương lai.
• Lập luận 2: Chất lượng giáo dục không đồng đều và bị chi phối bởi cha mẹ
  → Chương trình học không chuẩn hóa → thiếu hụt kiến thức nền tảng.
  → Cha mẹ có thể thiên vị môn học mình thích → mất cân bằng trong phát triển toàn diện.

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Tủ Grammar

Cấu Trúc / Grammar	Ví dụ áp dụng trong bài
It is + adj + for sb to do sth	It is challenging for home-schooled children to develop adequate social skills.
Cause and Effect (Câu nhân – quả)	Lack of peer interaction often leads to poor communication skills and social withdrawal.
With + noun / V-ing	With personalised learning, students can study at their own pace without external pressure.
Instead of + V-ing	Instead of going to school, more children are now educated at home.
Subject + should be + V3 (bị động)	Standardised subjects should be included in any home education curriculum.
Not only … but also …	Not only do they avoid school bullying, but they also enjoy flexible schedules.
A better response would be to…	A better response would be to combine home education with occasional group learning.
Despite + noun/V-ing	Despite its benefits, homeschooling may hinder the child’s social growth.
Participial phrase (phẩy + V-ing)	…, reducing exposure to harmful environments such as bullying and academic stress.
Relative clause (who/which/where…)	Children who are home-schooled often lack opportunities for teamwork and public speaking.