Writing Task 2

TASK 2 (DISCUSS BOTH VIEWS): CULTURAL EROSION

Some people say that the increasing business and cultural contact between countries has positive effects. Others say it would lead to the loss of national identities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Sample Answer

Proponents of globalisation contend that the growing commercial and cultural collaboration between countries worldwide has concrete benefits, while critics of such contact argue the case for cultural erosion, citing the potential dilution of national heritages. This essay will discuss both viewpoints before presenting my personal take on this contention.

There are legitimate arguments underscoring significant positives stemming from increasing business opportunities among nations. In this increasingly interconnected world, countries no longer focus exclusively on domestic growth but propose trade deals and engage in commercial cooperation on both regional and international scales. Such extended collaboration facilitates elaborate trade networks, lowers tariffs, and compensates for each individual nation’s shortcomings. This is further augmented by cross-border logistics and accommodating legislation, thereby resulting in mutual benefits for all countries involved. An instructive example is VinFast, a prominent automaker in Vietnam. By importing components from numerous countries, including Germany and Japan, the company has been able to assemble cars to sell in the Southeast Asian markets and also apply for an IPO in the USA.

In addition, transnational cultural exchange can yield tangible advantages. This is provided that outdated customs and inappropriate traditions are properly regulated and selectively eliminated, leaving behind nurturing and productive cultural values that are preserved and cherished. A salient example is that most companies in Silicon Valley, over the past few decades, have adopted the century-long habits of the Japanese, including resilience, conscientiousness, and frugality, believing that these traditional values are closely tied to consistent success.

Admittedly, opponents of cultural homogenisation cite cultural erosion as a valid argument. They maintain that increasing commercial trade and cultural exchange can hamper domestic growth and undermine national identity. A counter-example to this claim would be that despite foreign influences in the entertainment industry, Vietnamese domestically made movies have continued to remain dominant in the country’s recreational market.

In conclusion, enhanced commercial and cultural contact between countries brings about emerging business opportunities for all countries involved and leads to the adoption of constructive cultural values. Despite potential claims regarding cultural dilution, this can be rectified by cultural preservation efforts led by governments, businesses, and individuals.

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TỪ VỰNG HAY

Some people say that the increasing business and cultural contact between countries has positive effects. Others say it would lead to the loss of national identities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Proponents of globalisation contend that the growing commercial and cultural collaboration between countries worldwide has concrete benefits, while critics of such contact argue the case for cultural erosion, citing the potential dilution of national heritages. This essay will discuss both viewpoints before presenting my personal take on this contention.

There are legitimate arguments underscoring significant positives stemming from increasing business opportunities among nations. In this increasingly interconnected world, countries no longer focus exclusively on domestic growth but propose trade deals and engage in commercial cooperation on both regional and international scales. Such extended collaboration facilitates elaborate trade networks, lowers tariffs, and compensates for each individual nation’s shortcomings. This is further augmented by cross-border logistics and accommodating legislation, thereby resulting in mutual benefits for all countries involved. An instructive example is VinFast, a prominent automaker in Vietnam. By importing components from numerous countries, including Germany and Japan, the company has been able to assemble cars to sell in the Southeast Asian markets and also apply for an IPO in the USA.

In addition, transnational cultural exchange can yield tangible advantages. This is provided that outdated customs and inappropriate traditions are properly regulated and selectively eliminated, leaving behind nurturing and productive cultural values that are preserved and cherished. A salient example is that most companies in Silicon Valley, over the past few decades, have adopted the century-long habits of the Japanese, including resilience, conscientiousness, and frugality, believing that these traditional values are closely tied to consistent success.

Admittedly, opponents of cultural homogenisation cite cultural erosion as a valid argument. They maintain that increasing commercial trade and cultural exchange can hamper domestic growth and undermine national identity. A counter-example to this claim would be that despite foreign influences in the entertainment industry, Vietnamese domestically made movies have continued to remain dominant in the country’s recreational market.

In conclusion, enhanced commercial and cultural contact between countries brings about emerging business opportunities for all countries involved and leads to the adoption of constructive cultural values. Despite potential claims regarding cultural dilution, this can be rectified by cultural preservation efforts led by governments, businesses, and individuals.

Vocabulary

  1. growing commercial and cultural collaboration — sự hợp tác thương mại và văn hoá ngày càng tăng
  2. concrete benefits — lợi ích rõ ràng / cụ thể
  3. cultural erosion — sự xói mòn văn hoá
  4. dilution of national heritages — sự phai nhạt di sản dân tộc
  5. significant positives — những mặt tích cực đáng kể
  6. increasing business opportunities — cơ hội kinh doanh ngày càng tăng
  7. increasingly interconnected world — thế giới ngày càng kết nối
  8. commercial cooperation — hợp tác thương mại
  9. elaborate trade networks — mạng lưới thương mại phức tạp
  10. lowers tariffs — giảm thuế quan
  11. compensates for each individual nation’s shortcomings — bù đắp thiếu sót của từng quốc gia
  12. cross-border logistics — hậu cần xuyên biên giới
  13. accommodating legislation — luật pháp hỗ trợ / thân thiện
  14. mutual benefits — lợi ích đôi bên
  15. IPO in the USA — phát hành cổ phiếu lần đầu tại Mỹ
  16. transnational cultural exchange — trao đổi văn hoá xuyên quốc gia
  17. tangible advantages — lợi ích hữu hình
  18. outdated customs — phong tục lỗi thời
  19. nurturing and productive cultural values — giá trị văn hoá nuôi dưỡng và hiệu quả
  20. salient example — ví dụ nổi bật
  21. century-long habits — thói quen kéo dài hàng thế kỷ
  22. resilience — sức bền / khả năng chống chịu
  23. conscientiousness — sự tận tâm, tỉ mỉ
  24. frugality — tính tiết kiệm
  25. consistent success — thành công bền vững

DÀN Ý & PARAPHRASING

📌 Introduction – Mở bài

  • Keyword: globalisationparaphrase: commercial & cultural collaboration
  • Vấn đề: benefits vs cultural lossparaphrase: concrete advantages vs cultural erosion
  • Cấu trúc: Discuss both → personal view
    → (Giữ form chuẩn IELTS)

📌 Body 1 – Lợi ích kinh tế

Keyword: economic benefits → paraphrase chain:

  • business opportunitiestrade dealscommercial cooperation
  • global economyincreasingly interconnected world
  • help countries growcompensate shortcomings

Idea pattern:
→ Collaboration → elaborate trade networkslower tariffsmutual benefits

Example: VinFast → importing componentsIPO in the USA


📌 Body 2 – Lợi ích văn hoá

Keyword: cultural exchange → paraphrase:

  • transnational cultural exchange
  • cross-border cultural contact

Idea:
Good culture kept → bad culture removed
nurturing & productive cultural values

Example: Silicon Valley → adopt resilience, frugality, conscientiousness


📌 Counter-argument – Phản biện

Keyword: cultural erosion → paraphrase:

  • dilution of national heritage
  • cultural homogenisation

Rebuttal strategy:
→ despite foreign influence → domestic identity remains dominant
→ VN film industry = ví dụ


📌 Conclusion – Kết luận

Keyword summary:

  • enhanced commercial & cultural contactemerging opportunities
  • constructive cultural values
  • Solution: cultural preservation efforts

🔑 TÓM LẠI PHƯƠNG PHÁP PARAPHRASE

1️. Không đổi nghĩa, đổi từ loại / cấu trúc

  • cultural erosion → dilution of heritage → homogenisation

2️. Dùng adjective + noun thay vì noun alone

  • benefits → concrete benefits
  • positives → significant positives

3️. Từ đồng trường nghĩa (same lexical field)

  • globalisation → international cooperation → cross-border collaboration

4️. Triển khai keywords thành ideas → examples → vocab

  • trade → tariffs → logistics → IPO
  • culture → values → customs → identity

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