Doctor Consultation

Nguồn: Get IELTS Band 9 Task one Writing Data, Charts and Graphs by Cambridge IELTS Consultants

Sample 1:

The given chart illustrates how much time people spend with their family GPs (General Practitioners), classified in terms of different age demographics. 

Overall, time spent with doctors increases in most countries, except in Japan where it remains largely stable across all age groups. Additionally, India and Kenya are the only two nations in which declines are seen.

It can be seen that the main trend is in favor of upward movements. This can first be evidenced in France, where the figure more than doubles, rising markedly from 16 for the youngest group to 38 minutes for the oldest one. Similar patterns can be seen in the USA, with the figure climbing from 13 to 31 minutes, the UK from 9 to 21 minutes, and Italy from 17 to 29 minutes.

With regard to other countries with progressive patterns, minutes spent with household doctors in Brazil grow consistently to peak at 26 minutes for people aged 40-60, with a subsequent drop to 20 minutes for those aged 70 plus. On the other hand, there is a steady increase in Chile, to a lesser extent, beginning at 32 and ending at 39 minutes.

Turning to Japan and Kenya, the former remains largely stable, fluctuating from 12 to 16 minutes. The latter, by contrast, declines gradually from 15 minutes for children aged 0-10 to 10 minutes for the elderly aged 70+. Lastly, India climbs to a high of 21 minutes for 40-60-year-olds before falling to end at 11 minutes.

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Phân tích

Có quá nhiều thông tin trong bài này (9 quốc gia + 6 nhóm tuổi) 🡪 Tổng cộng: 9×6 = 54 data points. Nếu làm theo kiểu liệt kê thì không biết đến khi nào mới xong. Còn nếu so sánh thông thường (Lớn nhất & Nhỏ nhất) thì không thể lột tả hết được xu hướng. 

Cách hiệu quả ở đây là treat “Age” như là “Timeline” – Trục thời gian, từ đấy cái Table này được xử như dạng TREND, không khác gì cái Line graph với tổng cộng 9 đường lines. 

Có nhiều cách để nhóm thông tin bài này, nhưng nhìn tổng quan, chỉ có những nhóm sau: 

• NHÓM TĂNG 
• NHÓM GIỮ NGUYÊN (SIDEWAYS)
• NHÓM GIẢM

Nếu muốn nhóm cụ thể hơn nữa có thể chia ra: 

• NHÓM TĂNG: Tăng một lèo không có ĐỈNH điều chỉnh (France, USA, UK, Italy) & Tăng có ĐỈNH điều chỉnh (Brazil) & Tăng nhẹ (Chile). Gộp tất cả những thằng tăng X2 lại với nhau
• NHÓM GIỮ NGUYÊN (SIDEWAYS): Chỉ có Japan
• NHÓM GIẢM: India và Kenya, trong đó India tăng lên ĐỈNH xong mới điều chỉnh giảm

Khi đó ta chỉ cần dùng cấu trúc Tăng – Giảm mà viết.

Vì thế Overview sẽ như sau: 

Overall, time spent with doctors increases in most countries, except in Japan where it remains largely stable across all age groups. Additionally, India and Kenya are the only two nations in which declines are seen.

“The only” là cái nếu được bạn hãy đưa vào Overview vì nó thể hiện sự quan sát tinh tế, tìm ra những xu hướng DUY NHẤT. 

Thân bài cứ cho mỗi xu hướng vào 1 Body. 

Body 1: 

1. It can be seen that the main trend is in favor of upward movements. 🡪 Tổng quan
2. This can first be evidenced in France, where the figure more than doubles, rising markedly from 16 for the youngest group to 38 minutes for the oldest one. 🡪 France trước, chỉ cần nêu điểm đầu và điểm cuối, tăng x2
3. Similar patterns can be seen in the USA, with the figure climbing from 13 to 31 minutes, the UK from 9 to 21 minutes, and Italy from 17 to 29 minutes. 🡪 Liệt kê cả 3 thằng USA, the UK, Italy cùng một lúc

Body 2: 

1. With regard to other countries with progressive patterns, minutes spent with household doctors in Brazil grow consistently to peak at 26 minutes for people aged 40-60, with a subsequent drop to 20 minutes for those aged 70 plus. 🡪 Quy tắc 3 điểm (“with”) miêu tả tăng đến peak xong giảm
2. On the other hand, there is a steady increase in Chile, to a lesser extent, beginning at 32 and ending at 39 minutes. 🡪 Phẩy + V-ing (“beginning”)

Body 3: 

1. Turning to Japan and Kenya, the former remains largely stable, fluctuating from 12 to 16 minutes. 🡪 Nêu lên cụ thể sideways trong khoảng nào (từ 12 đến 16)
2. The latter, by contrast, declines gradually from 15 minutes for children aged 0-10 to 10 minutes for the elderly aged 70+. 🡪 Xu hướng giảm
3. Lastly, India climbs to a high of 21 minutes for 40-60-year-olds before falling to end at 11 minutes. 🡪 Quy tắc 3 điểm (“before”) miêu tả tăng đến “a high” xong giảm

Đây là sample 2 cũng của bài này cho các Bạn tham khảo:

Sample 2:  

The table illustrates how much time people of varying age cohorts spend with their family doctors in 9 different countries. 

Overall, only in Japan does the time spent with family healthcare practitioners remain stable across all age demographics, while India and Kenya see decreases in the consultation period as people age. Additionally, it takes Chilean people, in general, the longest in their consultation with family GPs (General Practitioners), followed by Italians, with children seeing their doctors only briefly compared to older adolescents and adults.

Regarding countries with increasing trends, France, Brazil, the USA, the UK, and Italy all show largely similar upward trajectories, with their figures roughly doubling from children less than 10 years old to the elderly aged 70 and above. This can be evidenced by marked rises from 16 to 38 minutes, 12 to 20 minutes, 13 to 31 minutes, 9 to 21 minutes, and finally 17 to 29 minutes, respectively for the aforementioned countries, with peaks observed between 40 and 70 years old (for France, Brazil, the USA), and at 70+ for the UK and Italy.

Turning to the remaining nations, Japan’s number is stable, fluctuating around 15 minutes across all age cohorts. By contrast, the figure for India rises to peak at 20 minutes for 20-40 adults, with a subsequent drop to 11 minutes. Lastly, there is a decrease in Kenya’s consultation time, falling steadily from 15 minutes to 10 minutes.

Vocabulary:

Sample 1: 

The given chart illustrates how much time people spend with their family GPs (General Practitioners), classified in terms of different age demographics. 

Overall, time spent with doctors increases in most countries, except in Japan where it remains largely stable across all age groups. Additionally, India and Kenya are the only two nations in which declines are seen.

It can be seen that the main trend is in favor of upward movements. This can first be evidenced in France, where the figure more than doubles, rising markedly from 16 for the youngest group to 38 minutes for the oldest one. Similar patterns can be seen in the USA, with the figure climbing from 13 to 31 minutes, the UK from 9 to 21 minutes, and Italy from 17 to 29 minutes.

With regard to other countries with progressive patterns, minutes spent with household doctors in Brazil grow consistently to peak at 26 minutes for people aged 40-60, with a subsequent drop to 20 minutes for those aged 70 plus. On the other hand, there is a steady increase in Chile, to a lesser extent, beginning at 32 and ending at 39 minutes.

Turning to Japan and Kenya, the former remains largely stable, fluctuating from 12 to 16 minutes. The latter, by contrast, declines gradually from 15 minutes for children aged 0-10 to 10 minutes for the elderly aged 70+. Lastly, India climbs to a high of 21 minutes for 40-60-year-olds before falling to end at 11 minutes.

• Family GPs (General Practitioners) (Bác sĩ gia đình)
• Classified in terms of (Được phân loại theo)
• Age demographics (Nhân khẩu học theo độ tuổi)
• Stable across all age groups (Ổn định ở tất cả các nhóm tuổi)
• Upward movements (Sự gia tăng)
• Evidenced in (Được chứng minh ở)
• Markedly (Đáng kể)
• Progressive patterns (chiều hướng tăng)
• Consistently (Một cách nhất quán)
• Fluctuating from…to (Biến động từ…đến…) 

Sample 2:  

The table illustrates how much time people of varying age cohorts spend with their family doctors in 9 different countries. 

Overall, only in Japan does the time spent with family healthcare practitioners remain stable across all age demographics, while India and Kenya see decreases in the consultation period as people age. Additionally, it takes Chilean people, in general, the longest in their consultation with family GPs (General Practitioners), followed by Italians, with children seeing their doctors only briefly compared to older adolescents and adults.

Regarding countries with increasing trends, France, Brazil, the USA, the UK, and Italy all show largely similar upward trajectories, with their figures roughly doubling from children less than 10 years old to the elderly aged 70 and above. This can be evidenced by marked rises from 16 to 38 minutes, 12 to 20 minutes, 13 to 31 minutes, 9 to 21 minutes, and finally 17 to 29 minutes, respectively for the aforementioned countries, with peaks observed between 40 and 70 years old (for France, Brazil, the USA), and at 70+ for the UK and Italy.

Turning to the remaining nations, Japan’s number is stable, fluctuating around 15 minutes across all age cohorts. By contrast, the figure for India rises to peak at 20 minutes for 20-40 adults, with a subsequent drop to 11 minutes. Lastly, there is a decrease in Kenya’s consultation time, falling steadily from 15 minutes to 10 minutes.

• Varying age cohorts (Các nhóm tuổi khác nhau)
• Family healthcare practitioners (Bác sĩ chăm sóc sức khỏe gia đình)
• Stable across all age demographics (Ổn định ở tất cả các nhóm tuổi)
• Consultation period (Thời gian khám bệnh)
• Upward trajectories (Quỹ đạo tăng)
• Roughly doubling (Gấp đôi)
• Elderly aged 70 and above (Người cao tuổi từ 70 trở lên)
• Evidenced by (Được chứng minh bởi)
• Marked rises (Sự gia tăng đáng kể)

Fluctuating around (Biến động xung quanh)