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Writing Task 2

Retired People

Many retired people today are choosing to live in other countries.

What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

The phenomenon of retired individuals relocating to other countries has become a controversial issue, with some arguing that it can have negative consequences. However, in my opinion, the benefits of this trend far outweigh its drawbacks.

On the one hand, there are certain drawbacks associated with retired individuals moving abroad. First and foremost, they may have to live away from their families, which can negatively impact their physical and mental health. This is exacerbated by the fact that elderly retirees are particularly vulnerable to chronic diseases and mental illnesses. Furthermore, the departure of retirees may also exert an impact on the economy of their home country as they may no longer be contributing to it through purchases and investments.

Despite these potential drawbacks, there are far more advantages to retired people living abroad. Many countries offer advanced healthcare for older individuals, reducing the likelihood of health issues for retirees. Technology has also made it easier for individuals to stay connected with their loved ones, regardless of their location. Additionally, financially stable retirees can contribute to their home country’s economy through asset purchases and remittances, thus boosting the domestic economy. Moreover, the influx of retirees to other countries can lead to cultural exchange, mutual understanding, and enhanced cultural identities.

In conclusion, while there may be certain challenges associated with retirees moving abroad, the overall advantages, including improved healthcare, financial stability, and cultural exchange outweigh the disadvantages. Ultimately, the decision to live abroad is a personal one and should be made based on individual circumstances and preferences.

(255 words)


Essay Breakdown

Structure

Introduction

[1] The phenomenon of retired individuals relocating to other countries has become a controversial issue, with some arguing that it can have negative consequences. [2] However, in my opinion, the benefits of this trend far outweigh its drawbacks.

1. Paraphrase the given topic 

2. A clear opinion stating my viewpoint

Body

Paragraph 1

[1] On the one hand, there are certain drawbacks associated with retired individuals moving abroad. [2] First and foremost, they may have to live away from their families, which can negatively impact their physical and mental health. [3] This is exacerbated by the fact that elderly retirees are particularly vulnerable to chronic diseases and mental illnesses. [4] Furthermore, the departure of retirees may also exert an impact on the economy of their home country as they may no longer be contributing to it through purchases and investments.

1. A topic sentence showing the main idea – potential drawbacks

2. Provide the 1st supporting idea

3. Explain and develop the 1st supporting idea

4. Provide, explain, and develop the 2nd supporting idea

Paragraph 2

[1] Despite these potential drawbacks, there are far more advantages to retired people living abroad. [2] Many countries offer advanced healthcare for older individuals, reducing the likelihood of health issues for retirees. [3] Technology has also made it easier for individuals to stay connected with their loved ones, regardless of their location. [4] Additionally, financially stable retirees can contribute to their home country’s economy through asset purchases and remittances, thus boosting the domestic economy. [5] Moreover, the influx of retirees to other countries can lead to cultural exchange, mutual understanding, and enhanced cultural identities.

1. A topic sentence showing the main idea – advantages >> disadvantages

2. Offer a solution for the physical health problems mentioned in Body 1

3. Offer a solution for the mental health problems mentioned in Body 2

4. Provide, explain, and develop the 1st supporting idea – economic benefits

5. Provide, explain, and develop the 2nd supporting idea – cultural benefits

[1] In conclusion, while there may be certain challenges associated with retirees moving abroad, the overall advantages, including improved healthcare, financial stability, and cultural exchange outweigh the disadvantages. [2] Ultimately, the decision to live abroad is a personal one and should be made based on individual circumstances and preferences.

1. Restate my opinion

2. Extend the viewpoint by stating a final thought

Vocabulary

The phenomenon of retired individuals relocating to other countries has become a controversial issue, with some arguing that it can have negative consequences. However, in my opinion, the benefits of this trend far outweigh its drawbacks.

On the one hand, there are certain drawbacks associated with retired individuals moving abroad. First and foremost, they may have to live away from their families, which can negatively impact their physical and mental health. This is exacerbated by the fact that elderly retirees are particularly vulnerable to chronic diseases and mental illnesses. Furthermore, the departure of retirees may also exert an impact on the economy of their home country as they may no longer be contributing to it through purchases and investments.

Despite these potential drawbacks, there are far more advantages to retired people living abroad. Many countries offer advanced healthcare for older individuals, reducing the likelihood of health issues for retirees. Technology has also made it easier for individuals to stay connected with their loved ones, regardless of their location. Additionally, financially stable retirees can contribute to their home country’s economy through asset purchases and remittances, thus boosting the domestic economy. Moreover, the influx of retirees to other countries can lead to cultural exchange, mutual understanding, and enhanced cultural identities.

In conclusion, while there may be certain challenges associated with retirees moving abroad, the overall advantages, including improved healthcare, financial stability, and cultural exchange outweigh the disadvantages. Ultimately, the decision to live abroad is a personal one and should be made based on individual circumstances and preferences.

Vocabulary Highlights:

  • Phenomenon: A situation or occurrence that is observed and studied.
  • Relocating: Moving from one place to another.
  • Controversial: A subject that is the cause of disagreement or argument.
  • Negative consequences: Unfavorable results of an action or decision.
  • Benefits: The positive results of an action or decision.
  • Drawbacks: The negative results of an action or decision.
  • Physical and mental health: The state of the body and mind.
  • Vulnerable: Susceptible to harm or illness.
  • Chronic diseases: Long-term or persistent medical conditions.
  • Exacerbated: Made worse or more severe.
  • Contributing: Adding to or supporting a cause or situation.
  • Advanced healthcare: Sophisticated medical services.
  • Financially stable: In a secure financial position.
  • Asset purchases: Acquiring valuable possessions or investments.
  • Cultural exchange: Sharing and learning about different cultures.

Grammar Gems: 

COMPLEX STRUCTURE

“Despite these potential drawbacks, there are far more advantages to retired people living abroad.”

Here I used the structure “despite…there are” to contrast two ideas and emphasize the importance of the second idea. This structure is useful for IELTS learners to master as it can help them express contrasting ideas more effectively.

Reading

Further reading about this topic can be found here:

https://www.cntraveler.com/story/how-to-retire-abroad

Listening

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