TASK 2 (AGREE OR DISAGREE): STABLE CAREER PATH

Topic: People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who change jobs frequently. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Sample Answer (Viết canh giờ 35 phút)

In recent years, there has been considerable debate as to what constitutes career fulfilment. While there are valid arguments supporting regular job-transitioning as a viable option, I strongly believe that early professional choices are a far superior way to achieve career satisfaction.

Proponents of consistent employment transition point to tangible economic benefits. They contend that frequent job-hoppers may stand a better chance to secure well-paid positions in the job market compared to those with fixed employments. This is because individuals regularly switching careers may have access to a broader range of knowledge, expertise, and professional networking through their tenures at various organisations, leading to increased levels of confidence at job interviews. These experiences often translate to high-paying salaries, which are closely linked to a fulfilling professional life. However, this line of reasoning is flawed as these frequent job transitions mostly apply to entry-level positions, roles that tend to be less critical compared to managerial roles, such as CEOs and various managerial levels. For most high-ranking positions, regular job-hopping would raise concerns regarding the candidates’ loyalty, thus jeopardising their career prospects.

To fortify my stance, I would argue that early career decisions and job resilience are the precursors to a satisfying professional life. Being decisive about one’s future career early in life enables individuals to direct their focus, in terms of resources and commitment, into their long-term career goals. A career-oriented economics student, for instance, is more likely to study in earnest, attend academic societies related to economics and finance, and seek summer internships, with the aim of improving his technical expertise, establishing meaningful professional connections, and securing employment. Conversely, those without clearly defined career goals would not devise well-thought-out future plans and may end up transitioning across companies working in entry-level positions. While the former can eventually accumulate enough experience, attain recognition, and advance the career ladder, the latter tends to be limited to non-managerial jobs, earning far less by comparison. This would eventually lead to a less fulfilling career with reduced meaningful professional connections, diminished recognition, and lower levels of compensation.

In conclusion, though there are certain benefits to career-hopping, especially for entry-level workers, I firmly believe that early professional decisions and the willingness to maintain one’s employment are critical to achieving long-term career satisfaction since these can reinforce commitment, lead to increased recognition, and result in lucrative payments. Ultimately, individuals should only consider changing jobs when absolutely necessary.

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Sửa lỗi Grammar sau khi viết

Topic: People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who change jobs frequently. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, there has been considerable debate as to what constitutes career fulfilment. While there are valid arguments supporting regular job-transitioning as a viable option, I strongly believe that early professional choices are a far superior way to achieve career satisfaction.

Proponents of consistent employment transition point to tangible economic benefits. They contend that frequent job-hoppers may stand a better chance to secure  of securing well-paid positions in the job market compared to those with fixed employments. This is because individuals regularly switching careers may have access to a broader range of knowledge, expertise, and professional networking through their tenures at various organisations, leading to increased levels of confidence at job interviews. These experiences often translate to into high-paying higher salaries, which are closely linked to a fulfilling professional life. However, this line of reasoning is flawed as because these frequent job transitions mostly apply to occur in entry-level positions, roles that tend to be less critical compared to managerial roles, such as CEOs and various managerial levels. For most high-ranking positions, regular job-hopping would raise concerns regarding the a candidates’ s loyalty, thus jeopardising their career prospects.

To fortify my stance, I would argue that early career decisions and job resilience are the precursors to a satisfying professional life. Being decisive about one’s future career early in life enables individuals to direct their focus, in terms of resources and commitment, into their long-term career goals. A career-oriented economics student, for instance, is more likely to study in earnest, attend academic societies related to economics and finance, and seek summer internships, with the aim of improving his their technical expertise, establishing meaningful professional connections, and securing employment. Conversely, those without clearly defined career goals would not devise well-thought-out future plans and may end up transitioning across companies and working in entry-level positions. While the former can eventually accumulate enough experience, attain recognition, and advance climb the career ladder, the latter tends to be limited to non-managerial jobs, earning far less by comparison. This would eventually lead to a less fulfilling career with reduced meaningful professional connections, diminished recognition, and lower levels of compensation.

In conclusion, though there are certain benefits to career-hopping, especially for entry-level workers, I firmly believe that early professional decisions and the willingness to maintain one’s employment are critical to achieving long-term career satisfaction since these can reinforce commitment, lead to increased recognition, and result in lucrative payments. Ultimately, individuals should only consider changing jobs when absolutely necessary.

Tóm tắt lỗi Grammar

Error Type	Example	Correction
Verb–noun collocation	“stand a better chance to secure“	“stand a better chance of securing“
Uncountable noun usage	“fixed employments“	“fixed employment“
Preposition + noun phrase	“translate to high-paying salaries“	“translate into higher salaries“
Clunky causal structure	“as these frequent job transitions mostly apply to entry-level”	“because frequent job transitions mostly occur in…”
Possessive noun form	“the candidates’ loyalty”	“a candidate’s loyalty”
Gender-neutral pronoun	“improving his technical expertise”	“improving their technical expertise”
Parallelism	“transitioning across companies working in entry-level”	“transitioning across companies and working in…”
Idiomatic phrasing	“advance the career ladder“	“climb the career ladder“

Final Sample Answer

Topic: People who decide on a career path early in their lives and keep it are more likely to have a satisfying working life than those who change jobs frequently. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent years, there has been considerable debate as to what constitutes career fulfilment. While there are valid arguments supporting regular job-transitioning as a viable option, I strongly believe that early professional choices are a far superior way to achieve career satisfaction.

Proponents of consistent employment transition point to tangible economic benefits. They contend that frequent job-hoppers may stand a better chance of securing well-paid positions in the job market compared to those with fixed employment. This is because individuals regularly switching careers may have access to a broader range of knowledge, expertise, and professional networking through their tenures at various organisations, leading to increased levels of confidence at job interviews. These experiences often translate into higher salaries, which are closely linked to a fulfilling professional life. However, this line of reasoning is flawed because frequent job transitions mostly occur in entry-level positions, roles that tend to be less critical compared to managerial roles, such as CEOs and various managerial levels. For most high-ranking positions, regular job-hopping would raise concerns regarding a candidate’s loyalty, thus jeopardising their career prospects.

To fortify my stance, I would argue that early career decisions and job resilience are the precursors to a satisfying professional life. Being decisive about one’s future career early in life enables individuals to direct their focus, in terms of resources and commitment, into their long-term career goals. A career-oriented economics student, for instance, is more likely to study in earnest, attend academic societies related to economics and finance, and seek summer internships, with the aim of improving their technical expertise, establishing meaningful professional connections, and securing employment. Conversely, those without clearly defined career goals would not devise well-thought-out future plans and may end up transitioning across companies and working in entry-level positions. While the former can eventually accumulate enough experience, attain recognition, and climb the career ladder, the latter tends to be limited to non-managerial jobs, earning far less by comparison. This would eventually lead to a less fulfilling career with reduced meaningful professional connections, diminished recognition, and lower levels of compensation.

In conclusion, though there are certain benefits to career-hopping, especially for entry-level workers, I firmly believe that early professional decisions and the willingness to maintain one’s employment are critical to achieving long-term career satisfaction since these can reinforce commitment, lead to increased recognition, and result in lucrative payments. Ultimately, individuals should only consider changing jobs when absolutely necessary.

Vocabulary

1. considerable debate – cuộc tranh luận đáng kể
2. career fulfilment – sự hài lòng trong sự nghiệp
3. regular job-transitioning – việc chuyển việc thường xuyên
4. viable option – lựa chọn khả thi
5. career satisfaction – sự thỏa mãn nghề nghiệp
6. tangible economic benefits – lợi ích kinh tế rõ ràng
7. frequent job-hoppers – người thường xuyên nhảy việc
8. well-paid positions – vị trí lương cao
9. broader range of knowledge – phạm vi kiến thức rộng hơn
10. professional networking – mạng lưới nghề nghiệp
11. higher salaries – mức lương cao hơn
12. fulfilling professional life – cuộc sống nghề nghiệp viên mãn
13. entry-level positions – vị trí đầu vào
14. managerial roles – vai trò quản lý
15. high-ranking positions – vị trí cấp cao
16. jeopardising their career prospects – gây nguy hại triển vọng nghề nghiệp
17. fortify my stance – củng cố lập trường
18. job resilience – sự kiên trì trong công việc
19. career-oriented – có định hướng nghề nghiệp
20. technical expertise – chuyên môn kỹ thuật
21. meaningful professional connections – các mối quan hệ nghề nghiệp ý nghĩa
22. well-thought-out future plans – kế hoạch tương lai được suy nghĩ kỹ
23. climb the career ladder – thăng tiến trong sự nghiệp
24. diminished recognition – sự công nhận bị giảm sút
25. lucrative payments – khoản thu nhập béo bở

Dàn ý

Bài viết của mình sẽ bao gồm 1 đoạn mở bài (introduction), 2 đoạn thân bài (body paragraph), và 1 đoạn kết bài (conclusion).

• Intro: Mình giới thiệu vấn đề về việc lựa chọn nghề nghiệp sớm hay thay đổi công việc thường xuyên, và khẳng định quan điểm: lựa chọn nghề từ sớm và theo đuổi lâu dài giúp có một sự nghiệp viên mãn hơn.
• Body 1: Mình trình bày quan điểm của phe ủng hộ việc thường xuyên thay đổi công việc – cho rằng nó giúp mở rộng kỹ năng, tăng tự tin, và có thể dẫn tới mức lương cao hơn. Tuy nhiên, mình bác bỏ quan điểm này vì thực tế chỉ áp dụng cho các vị trí cấp thấp, còn ở cấp cao, điều này lại gây bất lợi.
• Body 2: Mình nhấn mạnh lợi ích của việc lựa chọn nghề sớm và kiên trì theo đuổi, như giúp tập trung đầu tư dài hạn, tích lũy chuyên môn sâu, xây dựng mạng lưới nghề nghiệp, từ đó thăng tiến và có được sự công nhận lẫn thu nhập cao hơn.
• Conclusion: Mình khẳng định lại lập trường: dù chuyển việc có lợi ích nhất định cho người mới bắt đầu, nhưng lựa chọn nghề sớm và duy trì lâu dài vẫn là con đường đáng tin cậy nhất để đạt được sự hài lòng trong sự nghiệp.

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Dàn ý cụ thể của 2 Body Paragraphs

Body Paragraph 1

Lập luận phản đối: Thay đổi việc làm thường xuyên mang lại lợi ích, nhưng có giới hạn

• Lập luận 1: Người nhảy việc thường xuyên có thể có cơ hội tiếp cận nhiều kỹ năng và kiến thức
  → Làm việc ở nhiều tổ chức giúp mở rộng chuyên môn và tăng tự tin khi phỏng vấn
  → Dẫn đến cơ hội có mức lương cao hơn, tạo cảm giác hài lòng với công việc
• Phản biện: Những lợi ích này thường chỉ áp dụng cho các vị trí cấp thấp
  → Đối với các vị trí cao như quản lý hoặc CEO, nhảy việc thường xuyên gây nghi ngờ về sự trung thành
  → Dẫn đến việc giảm cơ hội thăng tiến, làm ảnh hưởng tiêu cực tới sự nghiệp dài hạn

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Body Paragraph 2

Lập luận chính: Lựa chọn nghề từ sớm và kiên trì theo đuổi dẫn đến sự nghiệp viên mãn

• Lập luận 1: Có định hướng nghề nghiệp từ sớm giúp cá nhân tập trung đầu tư dài hạn
  → Học tập chuyên sâu, tham gia hoạt động học thuật, thực tập trong ngành
  → Giúp phát triển chuyên môn vững chắc và dễ tìm việc làm phù hợp
• Lập luận 2: Theo đuổi một lĩnh vực lâu dài giúp xây dựng mạng lưới chuyên nghiệp và sự công nhận
  → Dễ thăng tiến trong công việc, đạt được sự công nhận từ đồng nghiệp
  → Trong khi người thay đổi công việc thường xuyên thường bị giới hạn ở các công việc không quản lý, có thu nhập thấp hơn
  → Dễ dẫn đến cảm giác thiếu gắn bó và mất động lực trong sự nghiệp

Tủ Grammar

Cấu Trúc / Grammar	Ví dụ áp dụng trong bài viết
There has been + Noun (mở bài học thuật)	There has been considerable debate as to what constitutes career fulfilment.
While… , I believe… (mở đoạn lập trường)	While there are valid arguments supporting regular job-transitioning, I strongly believe…
Stand a better chance of + V-ing	Frequent job-hoppers may stand a better chance of securing well-paid positions.
This is because + S + V (mở rộng lý do)	This is because individuals switching careers may gain access to broader knowledge…
which are closely linked to… (mệnh đề quan hệ)	…higher salaries, which are closely linked to a fulfilling professional life.
would + V để nêu giả định	…regular job-hopping would raise concerns about loyalty.
To + V, S + V (mục đích rõ ràng)	To fortify my stance, I would argue that early career decisions…
enable sb to do sth	…enables individuals to direct their focus into long-term career goals.
be more likely to + V	A career-oriented student is more likely to attend academic societies and seek internships.
with the aim of + V-ing	…with the aim of improving expertise and securing employment.
Conversely, S + V (so sánh đối lập)	Conversely, those without clear goals may end up working in entry-level jobs.
While the former…, the latter…	While the former can climb the career ladder, the latter tends to earn far less.
This would eventually lead to…	This would eventually lead to a less fulfilling career.
since + clause (mệnh đề lý do)	…are critical to satisfaction since these can reinforce commitment.
Only when + clause, will/can + S + V (đảo ngữ nhấn mạnh)	Only when absolutely necessary should individuals consider changing jobs.