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Writing Task 1

Shop Closures and Openings
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The chart shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops opening in a country from 2011 to 2018.

Shop Closures and Openings

The line graph depicts the number of shops that were closed and newly opened in a particular country during the period from 2011 to 2018. 

Overall, both closures and openings experienced erratic trends, with both declining at the end of the timeframe. However, there was a more noticeable decrease in the number of new shops opened. Closed shops were higher in number for the majority of the period, with a more significant low, while newly-opened ones registered a more stable trajectory. 

At the beginning of the timeline, openings registered around 8,500 shops, which was dramatically higher than closures, at less than 6,500 shops. Both categories witnessed largely similar trends, with opened shops experiencing a more noticeable decline, falling precipitously to a low of under 4,000 in 2012 before a gradual recovery to over 6,000 in 2014. Closures also fell slightly to 6,000 in 2012, rose to a peak of above 7,000 in 2013, and then declined to 6,500 in 2014. 

There was a significant plunge to a trough of approximately 500 in the number of closed shops,  while openings only dropped moderately to 4,000 in 2015. Closures then recovered to over 5,000 before plateauing until the end of the period, whereas openings remained relatively flat at 4,000 until 2017, where there was a decline to 3,000 in 2018. 

Essay breakdown

Structure

Introduction: 

[1] The line graph depicts the number of shops that were closed and newly opened in a particular country during the period from 2011 to 2018. 

[2] Overall, both closures and openings experienced erratic trends, with both declining at the end of the timeframe. [3] However, there was a more noticeable decrease in the number of new shops opened. [4] Closed shops were higher in number for the majority of the period, with a more significant low, while newly-opened ones registered a more stable trajectory. 

1. Write a general statement to introduce the topic of the bar chart and its content.

  1. Write a clear overview to summarise the main features of the bar chart, highlighting the overall trends.
  2. Highlights and compares prominent data in the chart.
  3. Continue to highlight and compare data

Body 1: 

[1] At the beginning of the timeline, openings registered around 8,500 shops, which was dramatically higher than closures, at less than 6,500 shops. [2] Both categories witnessed largely similar trends, with opened shops experiencing a more noticeable decline, falling precipitously to a low of under 4,000 in 2012 before a gradual recovery to over 6,000 in 2014. [3] Closures also fell slightly to 6,000 in 2012, rose to a peak of above 7,000 in 2013, and then declined to 6,500 in 2014. 

  1. Describe the trend of Asia with a comparison to Europe. 
  2. Continue to describe Asia and Europe together
  3. Combine two categories, describing them together until the end of the timeline. 

Body 2: 

[1] There was a significant plunge to a trough of approximately 500 in the number of closed shops,  while openings only dropped moderately to 4,000 in 2015. [2] Closures then recovered to over 5,000 before plateauing until the end of the period, whereas openings remained relatively flat at 4,000 until 2017, where there was a decline to 3,000 in 2018. 

  1. Describe the trend of “the rest of the world”
  2. Continue to describe this category, comparing it with other areas. 

Vocabulary: 

The line graph depicts the number of shops that were closed and newly opened in a particular country during the period from 2011 to 2018. 

Overall, both closures and openings experienced erratic trends, with both declining at the end of the timeframe. However, there was a more noticeable decrease in the number of new shops opened. Closed shops were higher in number for the majority of the period, with a more significant low, while newly-opened ones registered a more stable trajectory. 

At the beginning of the timeline, openings registered around 8,500 shops, which was dramatically higher than closures, at less than 6,500 shops. Both categories witnessed largely similar trends, with opened shops experiencing a more noticeable decline, falling precipitously to a low of under 4,000 in 2012 before a gradual recovery to over 6,000 in 2014. Closures also fell slightly to 6,000 in 2012, rose to a peak of above 7,000 in 2013, and then declined to 6,500 in 2014. 

There was a significant plunge to a trough of approximately 500 in the number of closed shops,  while openings only dropped moderately to 4,000 in 2015. Closures then recovered to over 5,000 before plateauing until the end of the period, whereas openings remained relatively flat at 4,000 until 2017, where there was a decline to 3,000 in 2018. 

Vocabulary Highlight: 

  • The line graph depicts: shows or illustrates
  • Experienced erratic trends: went through unpredictable or inconsistent changes
  • A more noticeable decrease: a significant reduction that is easily observable or apparent
  • Largely similar trends: experienced changes in a similar or comparable way
  • Fell precipitously to a low: decreased sharply or steeply, dropping to a very low level
  • Plateauing until the end of the period: remained stable or consistent without much change over time
  • Experienced a more significant low: reached a very low level, often implying that the decrease was more significant compared to other changes
  • Registered a more stable trajectory: maintained a consistent or stable pattern of change over time

Grammar Gems

COMPOUND – COMPLEX SENTENCE

“Closed shops were higher in number for the majority of the period, with a more significant low, while newly-opened ones registered a more stable trajectory.”

The sentence contains a complex structure that combines two contrasting ideas: “Closed shops were higher in number” and “newly-opened ones registered a more stable trajectory.” The use of “while” as a conjunction connects the two clauses, indicating that they are happening at the same time, but in opposite directions. The sentence structure is an example of a compound-complex sentence.

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https://secretldn.com/asian-supermarkets-london/

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